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Tuesday, September 15, 2009

She May Look Like Me, but can Never be Me


No sisters are likely the same. Anne and her younger sister Venice have several things in common but there are lots of things they differ from and that made them distinct from each other. First, both are smart and honor students in their school but Venice exceeds more in extra curricular activities. Second way in which these two girls are similar is that they are both good looking, but Anne has whiter complexion than her younger sister. Finally the most common thing that makes them distinct from each other is the height, because Venice is blessed with such gift while her older sister Anne is the other way around. They may have several things in common but they can never be the same. Anne and Venice are different from each other thus it makes them unique from one another.

2 Comments:

  1. Carlo said...
    Your topic sentence contains a comma splice. Remove "Thus" in R.
    ...they differ from. DELETE "like" and start with another sentence:
    First, both are smart...
    Finally the most common thing that made (CHANGE MADE TO MAKES)Do not shift your verb tense. ...is the height, because Venice is blessed (DO NOT USE "AND") ...is the other way around. DELETE "IN" No period at the end.
    Carlo said...
    OK

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